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Phew. This is the post that got me to finally subscribe. And coming after VP JD "The World is Our Oyster" Vance just spoke at the Bitcoin 2025 conference. Vance's buddy is Trump's AI/Crypto "Czar" and Silicon Valley Trump Kingmaker David Sacks. I mean, what incentive does Sacks have to take the 10000 foot view? This is making me even more queasy. And I ain't just talking about corruption. Wait: is it still corruption if done out in the open? My first post- gads, I have no idea how to edit this mess. Should I let Claude have a go?

<<<Looking at your selected text, I found several areas that could be improved for clarity and grammar:

**TLDR Corrected Version**

"Phew. This is the post that got me to finally subscribe, and it's coming after VP JD "The World is Our Oyster" Vance just spoke at the Bitcoin 2025 conference. Vance's buddy is Trump's AI/Crypto "Czar" and Silicon Valley Trump Kingmaker David Sacks. I mean, what incentive does Sacks have to take the 10,000-foot view? This is making me even more queasy, and I ain't just talking about corruption. Wait, is it still corruption if done out in the open? This is my first post—gosh, I have no idea how to edit this mess. Should I let Claude have a go?"

**Proposed Corrections:**

1. **Sentence structure**: "And coming after VP JD..." is a sentence fragment that should be connected to the previous sentence or restructured

2. **Punctuation**: Missing comma after "Wait" in "Wait: is it still corruption..."

3. **Hyphenation**: "10000 foot view" should be "10,000-foot view" (add comma for readability and hyphenate the compound adjective)

4. **Sentence clarity**: The final sentences could be combined or restructured for better flow

5. **Informal contractions**: "gads" could be "gosh" or "goodness" for slightly more polished tone (though "gads" isn't incorrect

The main changes preserve your conversational tone while improving flow and fixing the sentence fragment issue.>>

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